OUR ORIGINAL POETRY: Share It Here
Hello there everyone!
If you're reading this it means that you probably are quite fond of poetry and writing it to. This is a thread to post all and any poetry that you may have, be it happy, sad, angry or just silly. All styles are welcome (free verse, couplets, slam) and it would be great to have at least one poem up a day for all of us to enjoy together!!
It's been a long time since I've felt the sun.
And it looks like there just won't be none.
I've always believed that I was the luckiest,
but ceased to understand that the fates existed.
It is an intricate tangled web that the future beholds,
It may be bright but I just can't be that sure.
For all that glitters ain't gold.
@MidniteAngel oh, I actually didn't know that. For me it was just a proverb that I learnt in Primary school but never really understood it's true meaning...
@ proactiveDime3437
Oh I wasn't trying to catch you out or anything haha, the line is a common saying and this blues track just happened to have it. I was just trying to show the link and suggest why your poem sounds like it would fit into a blues song.
@MidniteAngel I didn't for once think that you tried you catch me out. It's just that a line that had its origin from somewhere completely different can be interpreted in a different way that I didn't even know existed... :)
@ProactiveDime, This poem is wonderful. The rhymes are subtle and effective--there's a song-like quality, like someone singing the blues.
@Annie - That's because the last line is from the song "I Need A Dollar"
"Well let me tell you somthin all that glitters ain't gold"
Gosh, I think the saying "All that glitters isn't gold" is an old, old saying used in lots of stories and songs. In the 1500s, Shakespeare wrote that "Often have you heard that told" that "all that glisters is not gold." @MidniteAngel,
@Annie Thank you so much for your review! It is your positivity that is encouraging me to write more poetry :)
Sweat twitch in bed
in the steam at night
itches bite through scabs you don't forget to pick
this cage of skin
I thrash to release the hecticness
I snap in public watching out for friends
or would be friends
that judge me
because they know me more than I can
So I can't trust them
like they don't trust me
Alone
No plans
Can't sleep
hit by the morning
another day still this freak
Yo man, bro, yo sup brother
Dude, guy, mang, yo whats good bro
Yes my brother, You're the man, yo kill it bro
You good bro, Yo you straight man, hey big guy
Stop!
but why
we're just being normal
What's a matter with you?
(finally exhaling and breathing)
Wow, it was painful to read this, @knaiv
I can only imagine what it took to feel it and write it.
Thank you for sharing your work with us.
Meditations in Pajamas in Bed on a Sunday Afternoon
My existence -
A constant trek through uncertainty
With no purpose
Only trying to avoid disaster
I've forgotten joy
I've lost curiosity
Adulthood has trapped me
Fear has limited me
I've chased money and possessions
But what is it for
No substance
Where did I go wrong?
What path should I have followed?
I'm lost now
Living in shadows
People see me but don't know me
I speak but no one listens
Longing for the love of others
But afraid to love
I live day by day
Struggling to survive and maintain
But when there's nothing of substance to maintain
And survival seems pointless
What then?
Roses grew in the depth of her heart,
Daisies sprouted from her lungs.
Daffodils arose from inside her stomach
And lilies formed near her tongue.
She spoke so sweetly,
A trace of life
Following her wherever she goes.
But as this little girl grew up she found
That flowers die
And weeds will grow.
@chazlet, WONDERFUL imagery!!
Strong poem.
Some minor differences
Apparently give everyone
A whole load of "inferences."
The humans
Thinkin' they're so venerated
Their blades remain penetrated
But I'm not bleeding,
Nor am I seeing,
That color of rose.
I'm leaking the lachrymose
Monochrome
Locked inside a dome
This is my home.
@HazyShizzle
There is so much truth and raw passion in your words. You truly are a talented writer
@HazyShizzle, I agree with @MidniteAngel. And I think it would be a GREAT performance piece.
Out of Place
I dont follow anything.
I'm always out of the loop.
There was this story
of how atoms were grouped.
Before the Big Bang
and everything was void soup.
They say that the people we're with
Is those same atoms that clumped
With us in the void.
But what about me?
I've always felt a distance.
I may be close to someone,
but only for an instance.
Will there be a home
for atoms like me?
---If there are others like me?
And then I found you,
but slowly it's making me blue.
Are you just a passing atom of my life,
that kissed my particle and ignited fire?
Will it burn me down
or propel me to fly?
Will you stay with me and burn together
Until we get another Big Bang
that lasts
a second round
of forever?
@weepingartist, I enjoyed this poem so much. The play on cosmic and atomic physics is Wonderful!!
thanks so much @Annie :)
Seasonal People ...
Will it just get cloudy or will it rain?
Will the storm come with quiet shouts of pain?
Will the sun show again, or will it be spring never?
Is it possible that it might rain forever?
Its always night before day, dark before dawn..
But it looks like too far away the light has gone.
Dont make any more leaves fade away autumn..
Why wont you let the flowers blossom?
Its getting colder and colder everyday..
Is it possible, that spring is just on its way?
Every stanza has it's own different meaning =) Good one mate!!
Thank Youuu ^.^
Words
The words,
The words fill her mind.
Like a raging storm...
Clouding her true thoughts.
Making her think how terrible she is,
How everyone hates her.
Oh, how powerful are those words.
Those words start the blood flowing,
They start the girl crying.
Oh, what a wonder,
What these words can do
@Mizpah, There is SO much truth in this poem!
When I was a little girl and someone said something mean that upset me, my mother taught me this rhyme: "Sticks and stones can break my bones, But words will never hurt me."
My mom meant well, but she was wrong. Words can hurt a lot -- until we develop more inner confidence and learn that a person's words say more about them than they do about us.
@KnighTerrAin I tried to do a poem on darkness... Not my best but hey, why not.
Darkness
They say
Holds everything
And nothing
all at once
often times darkness has haunted my head
when it plagues my mind
as I'm lying in bed
and often times my nightmares happen when I'm awake
my unseeing eyes
into which darkness penetrates
when my over reactive imagination
takes its toll
and fear burns into the back of my brain
and my down fall
darkness holds everything
and nothing all at once
I'm terrified of jumping into darkness and
terrified of what I might find
but above all, beyond my control
I'm terrified of tiptoeing into the darkness
to find nothing
at all.
@NewRomantic677 You're writing is phenominal. I'm sure @KnighTerrAin would be proud!
D'aww @MidniteAngel thank you :)
Are you scared?
he asks.
no
I am utterly terrified
of blades to my skin
of the corners of my sons
of destruction I pave
to which I'm a slave
and dreams that I build
off of tatters of wills
of the hopes that I've had
of the past that I've seen
of the memories that I am
and the roads that they lead
and the path that I'm on
and that I'm going wrong
are you scared? He asks.
no
I'm terrified.
@NewRomantic677, This is terrific. Wonderful sounds and rhythms, and the message -- wow.
Thanks @Annie :)