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Any ideas for a title to this poem?

TERATONCHRIS September 23rd
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So much space in what's unsaid. 

Pour my heart into letter, hoping that it might get read. 

So much hope but it feels like dread

I wait all night, alone in bed. 

Simple minds might feel ignored, might get even, keeping score....

But all I feel are tidal waves

Inside my skull, against my brain.

A violent current, sinking ships 

All hope is lost, this storm won't wane.

And on that night 

The crew was brave, but all it took was one rogue wave.

Beaten badly, the hull was battered

Having hope no longer mattered.

There SOS, lost in the weather

Much like the hope....

Put in my letter.

I needed help, so I shot my flare.

No help came, no one was there.

In the end we all were lost.

When you sail on hope.... You pay the cost.




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TERATONCHRIS OP September 23rd
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@TERATONCHRIS @slowdecline48

slowdecline48 September 23rd
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I don't claim any of these ideas are any good. Take whatever is useful:

  • Ship of Torment
  • Sailing On Hope
  • In My Stormy Sea
  • Sturm und Drang
  • The Sea Inside Me
LovelyForever6990 September 23rd
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@slowdecline48 I like these. I feel just as good about them as I did the one I initially thought of. And then couldn't produce anything else.

"A boat called hope"

LovelyForever6990 September 23rd
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@slowdecline48 I misspelled their! Ughhhhh grrrrr

slowdecline48 September 23rd
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"No help came, no one was their"...


(Sorry...I couldn't resist)

LovelyForever6990 September 24th
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@slowdecline48 NO!!! lol

"There SOS lost in the weather" ughhh supposed to be their and I missed "a" in between in-letter in the second line

September 25th
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@TERATONCHRIS This was lovely to read, thank you for posting this for us to read. 

blueLemon6419 September 27th
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@TERATONCHRIS this is beautiful and the sense of resignation is so strong. thank you for sharing.

TERATONCHRIS OP Sunday
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@blueLemon6419


Yess .... Resignation. And the feelings it invokes