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First poem

AmalieAnne May 4th, 2017

I have never writen a poem before but I thought it might be better than kicking something. So please be kind, this makes me so nervous for many reasons mostly because it is secret. I do not know if this is the right place to put it or if I need a trigger warning so sorry for that. Any how, here it is and it is called confused:

Confused

Are these tears yours or just because something made you cry,
Do you make those marks or does it just happen without control,
How often I am tired because I did not get the sleep I wanted,
How often I am tired because it stopped me from sleeping,
It kept me awake all through the night.

I once knew someone that was strong and able,
I could feel the warmth like the sun on my face and smile,
He loved me deep and I always knew that he was there,
His love expanded so much his dreams became mine.

I often wonder where he has gone now,
Wonder what I did to make him go away,
Something must be wrong with me.
There are such things as ghosts.

Ame

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Hayley44 May 5th, 2017

@AmalieAnne

This is a really great poem! It is such a good way of writing your feelings down. :)

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AmalieAnne OP May 5th, 2017

@Hayley44 Thank you

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wontwakewontsleep June 4th, 2017

@AmalieAnne

I am blown away by the simple depth in your passages - and the reminiscent somewhat haunting rhythm it has, at least for me.

Bravo!

Plus, you wrote this while you felt like kicking something instead, which is a line that I absolutely love! You deserve to be so proud of yourself for trying to do something you thought would be healthier, even just this once.

Really amazing! I can't wait to see what you write next. No pressure of course, write when you feel like it or when you think it will be a good idea, and I'm sure it will be just as great. Thanks for sharing!

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AmalieAnne OP June 6th, 2017

@wontsleepwontwake Thank you, I am not sure I can write another one but then again I did not think I could write one. I will maybe wait until I want to kick a pillow to death see what happens, the pillow might just get it.

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ferventflame August 27th, 2021

@AmalieAnne
The poem resonated with me a lot, thank you for sharing your beautiful work
Sending lots of love and strength to you
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AmalieAnne OP September 3rd, 2021

@ferventflame

always accepting love and strength, thank you smiley

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