Revision Help for Senior Paragraph

@TheCrew4887

Hey buddies. Your paragraph is really good, I peer edited it.

 I’d first like to thank my parents for always being there for me and helping me attend such a wonderful school with such amazing teachers. I will always be(always has already been used in the sentence above) grateful for my brother (E) who was always (sentence structure: who has been my) my biggest supporter and lifelong friend, (conjunction: and) for my grandparents who would(gr: has token) take care of me after school and during (seems be missing an article: the summers or the summer) summer, who never hesitated to take me to school events, and who always (always has been used too regularly, how abt who constantly made me feel beloved ) made me feel loved. I am extremely grateful to Dr. R for helping me feel appreciated, always (always seems to be unnecessary use a comma instead)helping me achieve my greatest academic achievements, and being there for me. I am grateful to Mr. M for helping keep me on track and helping me do my best. I would like to thank Mr. L for encouraging me to do my best and overcome my anxiety whenever I had to do a flute solo in (missing article; the band ) band, helping me step outside of my comfort zone and apply that confidence to other situations as well. Thank you to M. S and Mme. H for encouraging me to keep learning new things and helping me never lose (never lose seems inappropriate here, use keeping my passion)  my interest in French and go beyond what I was familiar with, reaching out to new experiences. After all, I must endure the presence of a few caterpillars if I wish to become acquainted with the butterflies.

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Wishing you good luck. And congratulations on graduating.