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A Piece of My Poetry

Athena108 August 24th

You don’t know where they may be,

Silently sipping their tea.

May look calm,

Good the lines on their palm.

But inside they’re dying,

All they tryna do is surviving.

Inside there is a spirit so kind,

But isn’t the world so spined?

Tearing the soul apart,

Hunting their mind and heart.

You say a thing that’s not so kind,

It may forever *** their mind.

They know how to hide it,

Suffocating the tears in a pit.

You may never know,

The things they don’t show.

To them darkness isn’t foreign,

It is Oh! So common.

This is an endless abyss,

But how do I know this?

You may ask,

Because behind the mask,

I am a victim.

The odds are pretty slim.

I know,

Did I ever show? No.

But don’t care now,

Did you? When I had to bow.

To the hardships,

Going through the flips.

It was a labyrinth,

I just wanted a hint.

I knew there was no such thing as perfection,

But still I hated my reflection.

A cloak of sadness draped my heart,

A tale of tears, the world apart.

None of you did care,

Said sitting on a chair,

“Oh, that’s nothing,

No need to still cling.”

Did you ever guess,

My mind must be in a mess.

No one could fix,

I felt like Nyx.

No one deserves,

The darkness they preserve.

So, stay strong,

Prove the world wrong.

Then sit by the sea,

And quietly see.

How far have you come?

Here now I keep my mum.

Think about it.

Doesn’t it all fit?


Soooo....how's it?

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LittleNini16 August 24th

@Athena108

Athenaaaa, your poem is a mix of emotional expression of the struggles many people face, which is often hidden behind a mask,frrrr, You've captured the pain, vulnerability, and resilience beautifully. Your use of vivid imagery "sipping tea," "lines on their palm," "tearing soul apart," "suffocating tears" creates a really vivid imagery your language is simple yet evocative and for your conclusion the final message brings hope and self-reflection "stay strong," "prove the world wrong," "see how far you've come" is it uplifting and frrr someone needs to hear this and know this ..... Sorry for boring you out in conclusion it was a beautiful piece ❤️❤️, can't wait to see more ❤️❤️

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Athena108 OP August 24th

@littleNini16

Awww...nini THANK youuuuu soooo much for this beautiful reply.

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p.s- u didn't bore me out gurl...u r sooo nice(ofc it's not the fact that I love being appreciated)

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LittleNini16 August 25th

@Athena108

Thanks Athena 🥺🥺

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@Athena108 

I m not very experienced in poem writing but i liked what you shared here 🌹

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Athena108 OP August 25th

@delightfulUnicorn38

Aww, thank you!

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YesWayJose August 24th

@Athena108Lovely!

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Athena108 OP August 25th

@NurseJose

Thanks!

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StarrySkies1236 September 12th

@Athena108

Your thoughts are beautiful to read but hard to think about, with the pain they speak to. 

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Athena108 OP September 12th

@StarrySkies123

Thank you <3

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StarrySkies1236 September 12th

@Athena108 There have been a couple times I sit down and type a whole thing out and it’s never easy organizing all the thoughts into something that I’m proud of.

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