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User Profile: cinnamon4018
cinnamon4018 December 8th

This is my first long poem so pls don’t judge Im new to poetry. If you have any suggestions I’ll take it : )

He has claws hidden by smiles

He has poison hidden by laughter 

He has fangs hidden by promises 


He is hungry

He is a predator


He seeks control

Control over little girls

To fuel his hunger

But he is never full


“He” are boys not men

Empty, ruthless, hungry boys

A hunter


I want to bash their heads in with hammers


I want to push them down the stairs over and over


I want to throw punch

One for every finger laid

Every look, every graze, every touch


I want to roll up every empty word

Every “honest mistake”

Every misleading syllable 

And set on fire


I want to throw the fire inside their homes

The fire will burn

It will destroy


And each scream the erupts and echos from he

Will be one scream won back for the little girls


We are not prey

Not any more

We are hunters

We are predators 

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User Profile: wIthpeACE
wIthpeACE December 9th

@cinnamon4018

What depth of emotions!! I felt a deep sense of frustration and anger yet being helpless. Its awesome how you captured the negative emotion of shame, all the while doing justice to the fighting spirit present in all of us. It is clever of you to contrast predators and prey- it shows people change!! Awesome work cinnamon! <3

p.s. we were all beginner once! ^^

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User Profile: cinnamon4018
cinnamon4018 OP December 9th

@wIthpeACE thanks : )

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User Profile: azurePond
azurePond December 10th

@cinnamon4018 

What a gripping and intense poem! The imagery is so vivid. There’s a real power in how you describe the predator, and then the shift to reclaiming control. It’s bold, it’s fierce, and it hits hard. Truly a fantastic first piece! . And like @withpeACE said, "we were all beginners once".

Keep writing—there’s something special here
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User Profile: cinnamon4018
cinnamon4018 OP December 10th

@azurePond thanks so much : )

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