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I did everything right

User Profile: determinedSea4370
determinedSea4370 2 days ago

I scaled a to-do list

Over breakfast

As the sunlight crept in

And I churned the laundry

And wiped my floors

Until I was surface-polished

And presentable-

A present to my parents.


I've tasted the outside air

For my prescribed amount of time.

I've scrubbed myself

And threaded sweet oil

Through my hair-

Hair grown long and decadent

Unlike myself

More like a show dog. 


And my parents cooed over my room.

And my parents cooed over my hair.


I live in an alien house

Of shiny surfaces

Where golems shriek

Over wine and screens

And nothing and nothing and nothing.


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User Profile: azurePond
azurePond 2 days ago

@determinedSea4370 This poem really captures the pressure to maintain a certain image or standard, especially within a family dynamic. The contrast between the meticulous self-care routine—“surface-polished and presentable”—and the underlying emptiness of it all is striking. The “alien house” feels like a metaphor for a life that’s detached from any deeper meaning or connection, full of performative gestures but devoid of substance. The mention of "golems" is powerful, too, implying that the people around the speaker are like hollow figures, caught in cycles of consumption and distraction. It’s a deeply reflective piece on the struggle to fit into a world that feels increasingly superficial.