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User Profile: Ana2024
Ana2024 2 days ago

10- messages I’ll never forget

The pain and anger that rushes through my viens 

The weight is strong and stopping me

From moving forth in what I believe

9- scars that show my pain

It’s so hard cause no one’s listening

It’s my fault they can’t see

So they just decide to leave me be

8- attempts that keep me thinking

Why so many times?

Why isn’t this working?

7- people on my nerves

I want to get rid of them all

But I’ll wait patiently and plan ahead 

6- reasons to stay alive

Is that enough?

Or should I just die?

5- seconds is all that it takes

To walk out the door

And leave without a trace

4- stupid hospitalizations

Held against my will

And refused a second chance

3- years this has lasted

With every moment that’s been passing 

No relief has happened

2- more years till I can date

Spend a life with someone great

1- heart shattered into pieces

Everyone sees it

Yet no one believes it

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User Profile: BastionKnight
BastionKnight 1 day ago

@Ana2024

Another very strong poem. I found the use of the double use of the numbering of events and the countdown very clever and successful, especially as you couple it with using less lines between each new number as we reach the end. It really conveys a feeling of the count speeding up and makes the read all the more stressful. The content is very sad, and my heart goes out to you.