Senior marching band speech (Bandimonies)

Every year my schools marching band does what we call bandimonies, its where all the seniors in the band give a short speech to the band.

Everyone recommends starting on your ideas for it as soon as you can, so despite only being a sophomore I want to start now

I organized a few ideas and topics to talk about and have written a draft that I want to get some opinions on

For reference K is a friend, E is another friend, D is a director, R is also a director

This is going to sound corny and I'm sure you’ve all heard this a million times from seniors in their bandimonies but band truly saved me. I first started band in my freshman year with copper mountains jazz band, i had never truly committed and learned an instrument before but the band needed someone to play bass and E recommended me to D, with his help i was able to learn so much in a very short amount of time, I will always be grateful to him for pushing me to learn more and get better.

 I joined marching band and percussion my sophomore year and almost gave up time and time again, i lost many people dear to me that year but R and everyone in front ensemble with me were understanding and helped me push through and make the absolute best of a very rough situation.

 I’ve gone through a lot of mental health issues over the year but music and band has been there for me through it all. 

Then theres K, she’s been my absolute best friend since the 3rd grade, she inspired me to join band and get into music, she’s stuck with me through thick and thin. I don't know where I’d be without her. Thank you K.

It’s been an amazing experience to be here with you all and see everyone including myself grow over the years. Thank you all and I hope to keep in touch with anyone who’d like to and I’d love to see what you all go on to do in the future. 

Again this is a very rough draft and some parts just hit main topics or points I may want to bring up