I need help from fellow community members

Hello everyone,

I am a prospective student applying to colleges and I know they are very competitive. I need someone to read my college essay and tell me how is it. I know people are busy but this would mean a lot to me. My grades are good but yet I am rejected and i believe my essays don’t make an impact. I need help from someone who is a teacher or maybe works in admissions department.

thank you everyone.