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Ghosts

User Profile: azurePond
azurePond 2 days ago

TW : Gaslighting, Stalking

The following text contains fictional elements that may include themes of fear, supernatural occurrences, and psychological tension. Reader discretion is advised.



I felt it first in the corner of my eye,
a shadow too persistent, too sure
to be the swaying of a tree.
Steps behind me when the street was empty,
breath so close I thought it could fog my glasses,
but when I turned, nothing.

At home, it began small:
the faint scrape of furniture shifting in the night,
drawers left open by unseen hands.
Then larger things—
the way the curtains would ripple
when the windows were shut tight,
or how the scent of earth and mud lingered
even after Auntie had scrubbed the floors.

I swear I saw it once.
Not fully.
But enough.
A figure crouched in the hallway,

It was always there,
just at the edge of light.
Peering at me through reflections in the glass,
its eyes burning
while I pretended not to notice.

Tonight, I keep my steps quick,
but not quick enough.
It doesn’t matter where I turn;
the ghost doesn’t need shortcuts.
It’s everywhere and nowhere all at once.
And when it finally happens—
when the street empties out,
when I am alone—
it runs at me,
a scream rising in my throat
just as its icy hand closes around my neck.

I open my eyes in my bedroom,
familiar but wrong.
The curtains flutter
as if someone just passed through.
The lamp buzzes faintly,
a sound that drills into my skull.
And on my neck,
dark bruises bloom like shadows
pressed into my skin.

She’s sitting in the chair by the window,
her dark hair brushing her shoulders,
her face carved from stone.
Her eyes flicker to mine,
and she sighs as if I am a chore she cannot escape.
"Another ghost," she mutters,
"No. It was a person. A stalker," I voice sternly.
She raises her eyebrows high,
And then-
Then. She. Laughs.
"What should I do with you?
You have your mother's black, witchy eyes,
and that's why the ghosts follow you—because of it.
It’s your fault, really."

"Not a ghost. We need the police!" I yell.

The trembling starts somewhere deep,
spreading to my hands as I clutch the blanket.
She stands, her shadow stretching longer than it should,
pooling at her feet like ink.
"Better not leave this room," she says,
her voice sharp, slicing the air.
"The police are not ghostbusters.
What you need is not an exorcism, but…"

She raises her hand, and I flinch.
Her lips curl into something unreadable,
her eyes piercing as she leans closer,
Her icy fingers digging on my jaw
"They can smell it on you—
the fear, the hunger,
the cracks in your mind.
So get it together.
I don’t want another hazard like last year."

Her words hang heavy,
and the air in the room thickens,
pressing me into the bed.
I don’t ask what happened last year.
I don’t want to know.

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User Profile: BastionKnight
BastionKnight 1 day ago

@azurePond

*Cries* I wrote a massive response, extoling your clever and imaginative use of the narrators perspective to slowly build up tension before the doubting character casts it into doubt, and makes us the readers complicit in the act of gaslighting. How all the thematic elements carry the sense of growing stress and solidifying threat, but then crash it down with disbelief and the dominance of a more forceful personality. How the passage of time in the first half adds to the anxiety, reminiscent of the feeling of being hunted. How you used so perfectly the horror trope of the unreliable witness. How their is a flip in stanza eight wherein the doubter suddenly throws back in the face of the narrator the threats they have denied as being real, and instead uses them to infantilise the narrator whilst attacking their sanity and stability. How in the last stanza we feel the crushing weight of all this doubt, a doubt we formed from the gaslighting behaviour that we the audience have become unwitting facilitators in as our own doubts of the narrators perspective feed into the dominance of the doubter who has grown into a sepulchral figure as fearsome as the phantom strangler. How all the metaphors and thematic elements showcase so artfully the insidious power of gaslighting and how easy it is to become trapped by.

I wrote soooooooooo much. I was typing faster than my little brain could keep up with because the piece was so interesting and rich, being capable of being perceived as a straight story of a descent into instability, or as a sinister tale with macabre threats, or as an allegory on the nature of gaslighting behaviour, or even a symbolic and deeply personal (and veiled) piece on pain, powerlessness, self doubt, and/or inner struggles,....or,....or, .....or. I was on a roll. So much i wanted to praise...then I went to click on a separate tab to check if i was using a word correctly Aaaaand...clicked off the reply i had been typing, losing it all. NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!

So, I hope you will forgive this potted version of my message of gratitude for you writing this for us all to see, but I was too despondent to try to write it all out again. Alas it appears once an idea has left my brain, if it is not captured in written form, it is lost to the aether.  

Thank you

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User Profile: azurePond
azurePond OP 2 hours ago

@BastionKnight I've got my thesaurus and dictionaries, so let's start with the decoding (I learn new words from u everyday)! First off, wow! You’ve seriously captured the essence of this piece . Your insight into the unreliable narrator, the power dynamics, and all of it is spot on. I mean, I’m kinda sad that you lost the first draft (because first impression and all)—although this “potted version” is a masterpiece in itself! Seriously, I’m flattered by your thoughts. Thank you for taking the time to dive so deep into it! Thank you, My poems and I are grateful to your kind encouragement!

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BastionKnight 1 day ago

*cringes when I spot all my errors* Oops...typing furiously when concentrating on a frustration makes BastionKnight a baderer rytor than his usual mediocre self, and makes him far less than the goodesterest quality he strives to achieve.

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azurePond OP 2 hours ago

@BastionKnight Haha, no worries at all! I totally get the frantic typing when frustration takes over (Paired with auto-correct fiasco). But honestly, I’m more impressed by the passion behind your words than anything else! Even the “baderer rytor” version is full of character.

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BastionKnight 34 minutes ago

@azurePond

*Smiles*

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