Was Meant for and Old Friend
I’m not too sure why I’m posting this bc it was written a while ago. I don’t mind critique, if anything I encourage it, but I guess I’ve kinda wanted to show someone this poem. I appreciate anyone’s attention. It’s pretty cliche and generic at times, but hopefully the entire thing works together. A lot of subtle messages inside meant for a former friend. Thank you.
Your essence haunts me
I swear I only told the moon about you
But with such information
I wouldn’t be surprised if she had shared our story with the stars
They twinkle a sort of Morse code
But my soul is too young for such old languages
All I can do now is search their sparkling hieroglyphs for solace
The day has finally reached its end
With only her murky glow left to guide me
Shadows are now carved from once full branches
And dead leaves offer a lullaby with the wind
I should put you to rest
But I’m not sure if you’ll return
If I shine a light, will you come back
Or will I just attract some bugs
I’d like to imagine a butterfly would appear
You always spoke so fondly of them
But I am reminded again that it is nighttime
Where the moths now roam, drinking up moonlight
What a silly mirage they offer
Almost a butterfly, but not quite
I was almost good enough
But I wasn’t exactly a butterfly, was I?
@MangoSlugs11
Thank you for sharing your poem with the community. Poetry is a beautiful way to express emotions and thoughts, and your piece carries a sense of longing and reflection. Your use of imagery and symbolism, like the moon and stars, creates a vivid atmosphere that draws the reader into your emotions.
The theme of longing and the comparison between butterflies and moths adds depth to the piece, conveying feelings of almost reaching a desired state but not quite getting there. The way you weave your emotions into the natural world is poignant and relatable.
Remember, poetry is a personal and subjective form of expression, and what matters most is that you've poured your thoughts and feelings into your words. Keep writing and exploring this creative outlet—it's a wonderful way to process emotions and experiences. Thank you for sharing your work with us.
@MangoSlugs11
I'm all for critique, so don't worry about that. I know you mentioned it might come off as cliche or generic, but I think the whole thing works together really well. Plus, I love how you've included those subtle messages for your former friend. It adds a nice touch of depth to the poem. Thanks again for letting us read it. You've got some talent!
