The raven.
I wrote this during the initial weeks after being discharged from a two week long inpatient stint. At the time I was trying to grasp onto a sense of strength and security in myself. I had recently started dating my boyfriend and wanted to try seeing myself from his perspective. It was an interesting exercise.
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Somber and dreary the raven sprinkled the ashes of her once ethereal self upon the moonless path.
With rage in her soul, and metanoia in her heart, she sings the song of her heartbreak and her wrath.
Rhapsody shines forth as the last of the ashes fall to earths floor. Sweet little raven, from broken, to Evanescent, to seraphic, to luminescent.
She evolves evermore, bringing forth the moonlight and mesmerizing all who gaze upon her.
@ChanaliBeth
A very charming poem. The themes of light, transcendence, and intangibility are really emphasised by the metaphors you have chosen. The poem has a natural feeling of progression from the darkness and finality of the first line, through the excitation of painful feelings, until the metaphysical rebirth of the figure of light; from damaged/discarded, to forgotten, to the return of angelic radiance.
The theme of light thus seems not only to encapsulate that of visual light but also that of a weightless, unbound aetheric nature. Which gives the subject an almost reverential inspiring quality.
I also wonder if the last line was intended as a subtle play on (and reversal of) Edgar Allan Poe's 'The Raven'; His "Nevermore" and it's descent into madness and doom, compared against your "Evermore" and ascension into virtual apotheosis.
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@ChronicallyChanali The choice of the raven instead of the phoenix is so intriguing! While the phoenix often symbolizes rebirth through fire, the raven carries a more somber, shadowed kind of transformation—rising from ashes not with pure fire, but with wisdom, rage, and sorrow. I love how this adds a deeper, more complex layer to the idea of spiritual change. The raven's journey from brokenness to luminescence feels like a more grounded, gritty path to enlightenment, one forged through heartbreak and resilience. Such a unique and powerful symbol for transformation! @BastionKnight has already given a thorough analysis of this poem, and I completely agree with it. The gothic atmosphere you’ve created really brings to mind the eerie, haunting vibe of Edgar Allan Poe’s The Raven.
