Echoes in the Abyss
Hi!:) this was a poem I made when I was reaching out for help, no one heard my cries as I shout my worries, so I made it into a poem, I hope I portrayed the turmoil of emotions well into the poem!:) (TW! Might be triggering for some)
"I suffocate, echoes swirling in my mind
A maddening breeze, a haunting dream
I call out my name, but it's lost in the haze
Does anyone understand? Will this torment ever fade?
Must one suffer for another's sake?
These gashes cut deep, plunging into the abyss
No escape, no respite, just an endless, darkest night
I search within, but my own voice replies
Echoing in anguish, a pain that never subsides
Despair takes root, growing like a tree
Firm, tall, and haunting, its presence suffocating me
A fleeting light crosses my eyes, but I'm drawn to the dark
A desperate cry, a plea to escape this endless embark
Who will illuminate this forsaken path?
A voice, a shout, a jarring scream
A mind in turmoil, racing, violent, yet whispering a soft, hurt plea."
Thankyou for reading<3 I'm not that well familiar as to how this works yet, if you're still reading, I hope you're doing well:), remember that you are not alone, as our own voice reply to our unrecognized scream there is one faint echo searching within the tumor of the 'abyss' willing to find you, I don't know if that metaphor was right but basically there's someone that loves you!<3 feel free to comment or chat with me privately if you ever feel the need for someone to look after or listen to you! I'll listen to each and one of you ( ◜‿◝ )♡ please remember to take care of yourselves and to never give up, I believe in you.
@Meowaik Wow, this is such a powerful and raw poem. The way you express that inner turmoil is so vivid—‘echoes swirling in my mind’ and ‘a maddening breeze, a haunting dream’ really set the tone, showing how overwhelming the thoughts must be. I love how you’ve used nature imagery too, like the ‘gashes cut deep’ and the ‘tree’ growing in despair—there’s something really unsettling and vivid about that, like the pain is physically taking root inside. The line ‘a fleeting light crosses my eyes, but I’m drawn to the dark’ really stood out—it captures that sense of hopelessness and struggle between wanting light but feeling stuck in the shadows.
And the ending, with the ‘faint echo searching within the tumor of the abyss’—that’s such a beautiful, haunting metaphor for feeling lost but still searching for something or someone. It’s an incredibly personal, heartfelt piece. Thank you for sharing this. And I love the message at the end too, the reminder that we’re not alone, even in our darkest moments. You've got a unique way of weaving emotions with imagery that really pulls you in. Stay strong, and thank you again for sharing this! 😊🥰
Thankyou so much! Stay strong too!( ◜‿◝ )♡